I wrote this script in anticipation of the newest season of Bojack. This was my official application to the Writer’s on the Verge competition NBC has every year. Thought I’d drop it before the actual episode aired and see how it matched up. Really had fun writing it. I hope you enjoy just click the link below!
Thanks!
After receiving several very good notes, I went back and did a few rewrites of the script and switched to final draft to fix formatting issues. I have uploaded the first twenty pages with the updates, as well as part of the second act. Everybody here has been extremely helpful, I hope you enjoy this screenplay as much as I enjoyed writing it!
Logline: When a rogue survivor leads resistance-fighters against a murderous dictator who controls what remains of post-apocalyptic Earth, they must face his personal army, bionically-enhanced Un-dead soldiers!
Kingdom, Come act one part of 2
Just click the link above! Ok got it? Good. So anyway I’d love your opinion on the logline as well as the first act and the first pages of act 2. I would like to hear honest opinions, if you like it say so! If you don’t, you can say that as well!
I only ask that both sides be constructive if you do feel like answering. I really appreciate you guys! Thanks!
Sincerely,
Brian Bell-Wiseguy Industries
Thank you to all my fellow bloggers who took the time out to read and review my script! You were all very gracious and helpful so today I’m doing something I don’t do. I’ve added a link to your pages on this page as a shout-out and testament to your awesomness!
Thanks again for reading Kingdom, Come!
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Sincerely,
Brian Bell-Wiseguy Industries
Ok so while I was gone I was able to use my ancient mac and an equally ancient script writing tool called “ScriptWright” to finish two feature length screenplays. (Yay!) Without further ado here is the logline for the first Sci-fi/Action film Kingdom, Come.
Logline: When a rogue survivor leads resistance-fighters against a murderous dictator who controls what remains of post-apocalyptic Earth, they must face his personal army, bionically-enhanced Un-dead soldiers!
Just click the link above! Ok got it? Good. So anyway I’d love your opinion on the logline as well as the first act. I would like to hear honest opinions if you like it say so if you don’t, you can say that as well. I only ask that both sides be constructive if you do feel like answering. The second one is still undergoing construction but soon I will be uploading the first act of that one as well. I really appreciate you guys! Thanks!
Sincerely,
Brian Bell-Wiseguy Industries
It’s official! I’ve gotten my team together for the 48 Hour film festival NYC! I’ve got all the paperwork and we’re raring to go. I’ll let everyone know the updates, and after I’ve submitted the film I’ll upload a trailer!
A challenge from one of my favorite Facebook groups was to come up with a 007 idea. So here it is! Just the intro though!
007
Collapse of Utopia
INT.-Gombo’s Lair-NIGHT
An extravagantly decorated lair. He has used minerals such as platinum, Gold, and Iron to create his lair.
Gombo sits in his room, his heavily scarred hands type frantically on a clear keyboard screen.
Pictures of the white house pop up, he minimizes these and pictures of the octagon house and the seven buildings pop up.
He studies these.
Gombo
Smooveout!
Smooveout comes into the room.
Smooveout
Yes sir?
Gombo
I know where they are.
Smooveout smiles.
Smooveout
Lets get them.
Gombo
You know, It’s never that simple.
Smooveout
Well, I can dream. What’s the deal?
Gombo leans back in his seat and studies the screen. He pulls up the white house again.
Gombo
Pack your bags.
He stares at the white house.
EXT.-DC-Daytime
Tourists hustle around the dc monuments. The WWII monument, The Lincoln memorial, etc.
The president stands outside of the Lincoln memorial, giving a speech. His wife and children stand behind him. Along with several secret service men.
President
The vision of this man who has been
immortalized behind me will forever
be our vision, one of equality, one
of tolerance, and one of forward
thinking. It is with great pleasure
that I reopen the Lincoln memorial
in its entirety including the reflecting
pool.
He cuts a ribbon and confetti flies into the air.
He turns to hug his wife. As he reaches out to her she is snatched from behind.
Smooveout, standing in for one of the secret service agents. Has snatched the first lady. He pulls out two guns, jumps back and shoots each agent directly between the eyes. The president lunges at him.
Smooveout gets caught moving putting the first lady in handcuffs and he’s punched in the face.
He whips the first lady into a column and kicks the president in the chest.
He’s sent flying down the steps.
President
No!
Smooveout shoots a grappling gun up and it latches on a drone. The drone shoots straight up into the sky and disappears with Smooveout and the first lady.
President
No! Michelle!
He is surrounded by secret service agents, but far too late.
INT.-British security headquarters-Night
M sits at a large oak table. He calmly places a folder on the desk.
M
How’ve you been?
007 looks at him.
007
Busy.
M
Good, agents should stay in
practice.
007
What is it you want?
M
The American First Lady has
been kidnapped.
007
Ok, call the C.I.A
M
It’s more serious than that. We’ll
be working jointly-
007
Whoa jointly? On a kidnapping case?
M
The kidnapping was just the
beginning. Open the file.
007 Opens the file.
007
Utopian Collapse.
M
A weapon designed by one Doctor
Julius Kendricks, a MIT graduate
and former weapons expert. He also
is a medical doctor and studied
evolution and DNA. He created a
biological weapon that is capable
of reverting human intelligence to
that of a two year old’s.
007
So America allowed the building of
a weapon they can’t control, what
else is new.
M
Julius now refers to himself as
Gombo and is hell bent on reverting
every person back to adam and eve.
By the time the states discovered
what his weapon could do it had
already been built.
007
and they didn’t get rid of it.
M
They did, kind of, but they saw the
benefits of being able to hold the
world at ransom and decided to keep
it. Now the scientist wants his
plans back and he knows the only
one who knows where they are is the
President.
007
So british intelligence-
M
Basically I want you to watch this,
they are underestimating this guy
and I want the best on our end
because its not just their country
in danger, its the world. Q has
your surveillance equipment.
INT.-British Secret Weapons bulding-Night
007 Follows Q down a hallway with people bustling in and out.
Q
So they gave you a nice quiet
assignment for a change?
007
Yeah
Q
Knowing you it won’t stay quiet
for long, but they’ve instructed me
to give you only surveillance
equipment.
007
Of course.
Q
Buuuut I can’t leave my man out on
a ledge like that AND I love my toys,
so you know I’ve got a few special
things lined up for you. Check it.
They’ve come to a room with a cracked wooden door. It looks strange and out of place in a building made out of metal.
Q turns the doorknob which immediately scans his fingers and shoots out a scan over 007’s body.
It swings open.
They step inside and another full body scan.
Q
Be…ready in a second.
It finally scans them and Q walks through the empty room to the wall.
He places his hand on the wall.
007
Q.
Q
Chill out! You don’t have anywhere
to be yet.
The wall flips over revealing a vast array of spy equipment. Many from 007’s past performances.
Q
We’ve got old stuff we’ve got
new stuff. Gonna keep you up to
date with this one but remember
everything we have here is off the
books yada yada don’t get caught
with it.
The first item he pulls down is a windbreaker jacket, a watch, a silver necklace, a tuxedo, and what appears to be a stress ball.
Q
Looks like a regular jacket but
you’re not stupid so you know its
not. This jacket is wired to
send and receive satellite
signals. The necklace is a
monitoring device, the tuxedo is
your typical first aid suit, and
the watch is a grappling gun.
007
And what’s this?
He grabs the stress ball.
Q
Ah that’s my favorite. Looks just
like a stress ball and if anybody
else messes with it that’s just
what it’ll be. But when you squeeze
it it sends out a shot to whatever
destination you program into it.
Enough to destroy an entire
building but you only have one shot.
007
One shot?
Q
Sent from the satellite. Don’t
tell M I gave you that.
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