After receiving several very good notes, I went back and did a few rewrites of the script and switched to final draft to fix formatting issues. I have uploaded the first twenty pages with the updates, as well as part of the second act. Everybody here has been extremely helpful, I hope you enjoy this screenplay as much as I enjoyed writing it!
Logline: When a rogue survivor leads resistance-fighters against a murderous dictator who controls what remains of post-apocalyptic Earth, they must face his personal army, bionically-enhanced Un-dead soldiers!
Kingdom, Come act one part of 2
Just click the link above! Ok got it? Good. So anyway I’d love your opinion on the logline as well as the first act and the first pages of act 2. I would like to hear honest opinions, if you like it say so! If you don’t, you can say that as well!
I only ask that both sides be constructive if you do feel like answering. I really appreciate you guys! Thanks!
Brian Bell-Wiseguy Industries